7 year old girl – after listening to a gospel account.
And after listening to Beautiful Stories From Shakespeare by E. Nesbit
12 year old (just give me the facts) boy.
A creative narration after spending time on Mozart in our composer studies.
This is a narration he wrote in the form of a letter after reading a chapter from David Howarth’s The Voyage of the Armada.
Pilgrim’s Progress (15 yr old boy)
Christian and Hopeful were walking along on the Way, after meeting Mr. Worldly Wise and his three friends, when they came to a beautiful river with hundreds of fruit trees along its banks. They decided to camp there overnight in a meadow next to the river where the lilies and the grass never died. The next morning they went and collected some fruit and water. Christian suggested that they stay there for a few days and so they did. Soon they were on their way again. That afternoon they came to a place where another road was alongside the Way and so they climbed over the fence and started to follow the other path. Soon, ahead of them they say a man. They called to him and he waited for them to come up to him. When they caught up to him they asked him if this path led to the Holy City and he told them it did, so they kept on. But soon it began to get dark, so dark that Christian and Hopeful lost sight of the man(whose name was Vainglorious). Then it began to rain and to thunder, and lightning lit up the sky. Christian and Hopeful were scared and they decided to turn back when they heard the moans of the man they had seen earlier coming from a deep pit in front of them. So they turned back, but as they neared the spot where they had come into this path they became very tired and stopping to have a rest, fell asleep. What they didn’t know was that the place where they were sleeping was in the dominions of a giant who’s name was Despair, and every morning this giant went across all his fields checking them. When the giant came to the field where Christian and Hopeful were sleeping he saw them and went and woke them up and asked them what they were doing in his dominions. Christian said they were lost pilgrims. The giant drove them back to his house, Doubting Castle, and threw them in one of his dungeons. Then the giant asked his wife what he should do with the pilgrims and she said he should beat them. So the next morning the giant went and did what his wife said and beat Christian and Hopeful. Then that night the giant again asked his wife what he should do to them and she said he should counsel them to take their lives. So in the morning the giant talked to the two pilgrims and tried to get them to take their lives. The giant went back that night to find that they hadn’t taken his, which made him furious. So he went to his wife again to get advice and she told him to show the pilgrims all the skulls and bones of pilgrims who had gone before them. So in the morning he did just that and then beat Christian and Hopeful all the way back to their dungeon. Then later that night Christian remembered that he had a key hidden in his bosom that could open any door, it was called the Promise Key. So with this key he opened all the doors and Hopeful and him got safely away from the castle. They then went back and climbed the fence again and continued on their way.
Temptation (Ourselves, Book 2, Ch XVIII) 16 year old girl
In her book ‘Ourselves’, Charlotte Mason talks about temptation. She says that the fact a man or a woman is tempted is not the problem; the problem starts when they entertain the temptation. Being tempted is part of human nature – Jesus was tempted too. When you’re tempted, the first thing to do is to immediately think about something else. When you fail to deliberately thrust the thought out of your mind, that’s when it becomes a problem. The most important thing is the continual repetition of a seemingly ordinary, everyday act, the act of rejecting certain thoughts as soon as they present themselves. This is why Jesus said to pray, every day,
‘Our Father, who art in heaven, lead us not into temptation but deliver us from the evil one. For thine is the kingdom, the power and the glory, for ever and ever, amen.’
I really enjoyed this post! I'm always struggling with different ways to approach narration and what constitutes a \”good\” narration. New follower!
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These are great Carol! very creative ways to do a 'narration'!
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Thanks Rosemary & Ellen, it's hard to be objective with your own children's work & sometimes I think it helps to see what others do especially if you have children that struggle with writing.
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What a fabulous post.I too struggle with my daughter's spelling. I feel more confident that she will get there after reading your post. Thank you.
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Nice examples, Carol. Thanks for taking the time to share these.
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Thank you!!!
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What fantastic examples! Your children have created such unique narrations. I'm sure that they are so proud of their efforts!
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Great examples of narration! Thanks for sharing them!
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Are you using the video course for The Grammar of Poetry or just the book? It is a bit pricey but looks very useful in this context.
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I'm just using the two books – the student & teacher editions.
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